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The graph show the progress of milk production. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph show the progress of milk production.
The presented flow chart describes how milk and dairy products are generated, along with essential equipments for the entire process. Overall, it is evident that the production includes 5 main steps, beginning with obtaining fresh milk and finishing with product delivery to shopping centers. Turning into detail, raw material for commercial milk stems from cows, which are fed on grass. The procedure commences when the herd is milked two times per day by a specialized device. Subsequently, acquired milk is refrigerated thanks to a storage container. This makes it ready for the next step, in which cold raw material is transported to Dairy by a milk tanker. In the fourth step, taking place at Dairy, fresh milk is used to simultaneously create two types of products. Specifically, residues are ingredients for cheese, cream and butter, whereas fresh milk is sterilized to eradicate bacteria. The process concludes when pasteurized milk is packaged, which make it available for commercialization at supply chains.
The presented flow chart
describes
how
milk
and dairy products
are generated
, along with essential equipments for the entire process.

Overall
, it is evident that the production includes 5 main steps, beginning with obtaining fresh
milk
and finishing with product delivery to shopping centers.

Turning into detail, raw material for commercial
milk
stems from cows, which
are fed
on grass. The procedure commences when the herd
is milked
two times per day by a specialized device.
Subsequently
, acquired
milk
is refrigerated
thanks to a storage container. This
makes
it ready for the
next
step, in which
cold
raw material
is transported
to Dairy by a
milk
tanker.

In the fourth step, taking place at Dairy, fresh
milk
is
used
to
simultaneously
create two types of products.
Specifically
, residues are ingredients for cheese, cream and butter, whereas fresh
milk
is sterilized
to eradicate bacteria. The process concludes when pasteurized
milk
is packaged
, which
make
it available for commercialization at supply chains.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph show the progress of milk production.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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