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The graph illustrates differences between computer ownership by education level. Write an essay with at least 150 words to describe it. v.2

The graph illustrates differences between computer ownership by education level. Write an essay with at least 150 words to describe it. v. 2
The graph compares changes in the people who own computers by education level. It’s clear that the computer ownership increased between 2002 and 2010. However, Post-Graduate Qualification had the highest percentage of people owning computers. In 2002, the number of people who own computers after graduated is approximately 75 percent. This number rose to a new peak just below 90 percent in 2010. In contrast, the number of people who don’t have a high school diploma had the lowest number of computer owners, in 2002, the number people who posess computers was only above 10 percent. However, the figures rose significantly comparing to other charts when it reached above 40 percent in 2010. The number of people who graduated highschool and have computers increased from 39 percent to nearly 70 percent. Both numbers of people studying in colleges and owning a bachelor’s degree tended to rise and both increased from just below 60 percent to above 80 percent.
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computers by education level. It’s
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increased
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computers after graduated is approximately 75
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. This
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rose to
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a


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new
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below 90
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in 2010.
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don’t have a high school diploma had
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the


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of computer owners, in 2002, the
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in 2010.

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and have computers increased from 39
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Both
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studying in colleges and owning a bachelor’s degree tended to rise and both increased from
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates differences between computer ownership by education level. Write an essay with at least 150 words to describe it. v. 2

Academic
  American English
10 paragraphs
158 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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