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The charts below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v.2

The charts below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v. 2
The chart compares the value of exports in different kinds of products (measured in billions) in one country in 2015 and 2016. The table shows the change in percentage of each category in 2016 compared with 2015. In general, the data can be divided into two groups: the first one where the value in 2016 exceeded that in 2015 and the other one where the reverse was the case. The first group consists of petroleum products, engineered goods, agricultural products and textiles. Specifically, the difference was the largest in textiles, where 15. 24% was recorded for the increase. In engineered goods, the gap was also significant with a growth of 8. 5%. In petroleum products, the value in 2016 was also higher than that in 2015, but the disparity was much smaller (3%). The agricultural products lied last, rising only 0. 81%. In the second group, it is instantly clear that only the value of gems and jewelry fell by 5. 18% in 2016. Overall, it is apparent that in 2016, more practical products were exported, whereas the opposite was true for the remaining ornaments. Besides, the year of 2016 witnessed a significant increase in the export of textiles.
The chart compares the
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value
of exports in
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different
kinds of
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products
(measured in billions) in one country in 2015 and 2016. The table
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shows
the
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change
in percentage of each category in 2016 compared with 2015.

In general
, the data can
be divided
into two groups: the
first
one where the
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value
in 2016 exceeded that in 2015 and the other one where the reverse was the case.

The
first
group consists of petroleum
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products
, engineered
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goods
, agricultural
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products
and textiles.
Specifically
, the difference was the largest in textiles, where 15. 24%
was recorded
for the increase. In engineered
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goods
, the gap was
also
significant with a growth of 8. 5%. In petroleum
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products
, the
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value
in 2016 was
also
higher than that in 2015,
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but
the disparity was much smaller (3%). The agricultural
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products
lied last, rising
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only
0. 81%.

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instantly
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clear
that
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only
the
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value
of gems and jewelry fell by 5. 18% in 2016.

Overall
, it is apparent that in 2016, more practical
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products
were exported
, whereas the opposite was true for the remaining ornaments.
Besides
, the year of 2016 witnessed a significant increase in the export of textiles.
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IELTS academic The charts below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. v. 2

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