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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features. and make comparisons where relevant. v.56

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon.
The graph depicts the development life cycle of salmon in seven phases, starting from the egg to its adulthood. The first stage of salmon life cycle is when it puts its eggs in fresh water or rivers when they stay until hatch after three months. Once hatching, the baby salmon is called Alvein feeds off the yolk sac for several weeks. The third phase is fry which is now known as Parr, develops finger shaped marking. In the next stage, salmots which are one to three years old forms group and swim out to sea. Salmons become adult and stay in the sea for about one to eight years which they are ready to spawn. The final phase when the spawning salmon dies after two weeks. Their eggs in the fresh water hatch after three months and the life cycle is continued.
The graph depicts the development life cycle of salmon in seven phases, starting from the egg to its adulthood.

The
first
stage of salmon life cycle is when it puts its eggs in fresh water or rivers when they stay until hatch after three months. Once hatching, the baby salmon
is called
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Alvein
feeds off the yolk sac for several weeks. The third phase is
Consider using a past participle here: "fried".
fry
which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
known as Parr, develops finger shaped marking. In the
next
stage,
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salmots
which are one to three years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
forms group and swim out to sea. Salmons become adult and stay in the sea for about one to eight years which they are ready to spawn. The final phase when the spawning salmon
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dies
after two weeks. Their eggs in the fresh water hatch after three months and the life cycle
is continued
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
142 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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