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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: •thank them for the photos and for the holiday•explain why you didn't wri v.10

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: •thank them for the photos and for the holiday•explain why you didn't wri v. 10
Dear Jane and Zeneth, How are you both? I am writing this letter to thank you from the bottom of my heart for the photos which you have sent me a day ago. Earlier today I downloaded all the photos you sent to me; the quality of the pictures is spectacular, you both have an incredible talent for taking photos. I was extremely happy to join you guys for the Italy trip. I enjoyed seeing historic places, beaches, cathedrals and gardens of Rome. Moreover, spending time together after three years is incredible because we shared lots of memories with each other. I was about to write a letter once back to London. However, on my return, I found that my relatives from India have come to attend the marriage ceremony of my cousin. So, being busy with them, I forgot to write back to you. As my family members are here for another one month, I invite you both to come along with Angelina to my place so that you could feel the family warmth. I am sure we will have a magnificent time together again. Hoping to meet you, buddies, soon. With love, Jenny
Dear Jane and
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Zeneth
,

How are you both? I am writing this letter to thank you from the bottom of my heart for the photos which you have
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sent
me a day ago.

Earlier
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today
I downloaded all the photos you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to me; the quality of the pictures is spectacular, you both have an incredible talent for taking photos. I was
extremely
happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you guys for the Italy trip. I enjoyed seeing historic places, beaches, cathedrals and gardens of Rome.
Moreover
, spending time together after three years is incredible
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because
we shared lots of memories with each other.

I was about to write a letter once back to London.
However
, on my return, I found that my relatives from India have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to attend the marriage ceremony of my cousin.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, being busy with them, I forgot to write back to you.

As my family members are here for another one month, I invite you both to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
along with Angelina to my place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you could feel the family warmth. I am sure we will have a magnificent time together again.

Hoping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you, buddies,
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soon
.

With
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
,

Jenny
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter: •thank them for the photos and for the holiday•explain why you didn't wri v. 10

Academic
  American English
8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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