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The graph below shows the working hours for men and women in the developing world between the years 1998 and 2003Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary v.1

The graph below shows the working hours for men and women in the developing world between the years 1998 and 2003
the line graph compares the number of hours that male and female workers did in the various developing nations in two separate years, 1998 and 2003. Overall, people in Mongolia had the largest figure for work than the other countries while South Africa had the lowest hours used to work. Meanwhile, women in Benin also had to work much time than the average. On the one hand, the working hours in Mongolia was over 8 hours per day, which also the highest figure. By contrast, only 44 minutes was spent to work by women in there. At the same time, there was a similar figure over 8 hours that people had to work per day in Benin, Mexico, and India but Benin witnessed the higher hours that women worked. On the other hand, the population in South Africa just spent only closely 6 hours each day to work, it also the lowest figure compared to the working hours in Rep. Of Korea, Madagascar, with nearly 8 hours.
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line graph compares the number of
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that male and female workers did in the various developing nations in two separate years, 1998 and 2003.

Overall
,
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people
in Mongolia had the largest
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figure
for
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work
than the other countries while South Africa had the lowest
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hours
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work
. Meanwhile, women in Benin
also
had to
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much time than the average.

On the one hand, the working
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in Mongolia was over 8
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hours
per day, which
also
the highest
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figure
. By contrast,
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only
44 minutes
was spent
to
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work
by women in there. At the same time, there was a similar
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figure
over 8
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hours
that
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people
had to
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work
per day in Benin, Mexico, and India
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but
Benin witnessed the higher
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hours
that women worked.

On the other hand
, the population in South Africa
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just
spent
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only
closely
6
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each day to
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, it
also
the lowest
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compared to the working
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in Rep. Of Korea, Madagascar, with
nearly
8
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.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the working hours for men and women in the developing world between the years 1998 and 2003

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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