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The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v.2

The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v. 2
The tables compared various aspects of citizens’ live, with three different levels of satisfaction between 1980 with 2010. Living environment got the most good in 2010, with 82%, while it only 65% in 1980, therefore there is a remarkable change in the environment of living. Meanwhile, education received the highest recognition in 2010, however, the proportion of good of it emerged a slight drop to 72%, and living environment was in excess of it. Otherwise, from 1980 on wards, the medical services and employment opportunities have a similar trend, showing a consider increase of good by 10%, which were both 63% in 1980. So, the bad attitude to them are decline notably. (8% and 10% respectively in 2010) By contrast, the decrease of the positive attitude toward shops and public transport were noticeable during the period. Particularly, the transport of public saw a dramatically decline to 38%. Overall, there were considerable improvements to living environment, medical service and employment opportunities in this city, but the figures for other aspects of life saw a decline in 2010.
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2010. Living
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environment
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good
in 2010, with 82%, while it
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environment
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living
. Meanwhile, education received the highest recognition in 2010,
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good
of it emerged a slight drop to 72%, and
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living
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environment
was in excess of it.

Otherwise
, from 1980 on wards, the medical services and employment opportunities have a similar trend, showing
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by 10%, which were both 63% in 1980.
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attitude toward shops and public transport were noticeable during the period.
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, there were considerable improvements to
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, medical service and employment opportunities in this city,
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the figures for other aspects of life
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a decline in 2010.
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IELTS academic The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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