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The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v.2

The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v. 2
The tables compared various aspects of citizens’ live, with three different levels of satisfaction between 1980 with 2010. Living environment got the most good in 2010, with 82%, while it only 65% in 1980, therefore there is a remarkable change in the environment of living. Meanwhile, education received the highest recognition in 2010, however, the proportion of good of it emerged a slight drop to 72%, and living environment was in excess of it. Otherwise, from 1980 on wards, the medical services and employment opportunities have a similar trend, showing a consider increase of good by 10%, which were both 63% in 1980. So, the bad attitude to them are decline notably. (8% and 10% respectively in 2010) By contrast, the decrease of the positive attitude toward shops and public transport were noticeable during the period. Particularly, the transport of public saw a dramatically decline to 38%. Overall, there were considerable improvements to living environment, medical service and employment opportunities in this city, but the figures for other aspects of life saw a decline in 2010.
The tables compared various aspects of citizens’
live
, with three
different
levels of satisfaction between 1980 with
2010. Living
environment
got
the most
good
in 2010, with 82%, while it
only
65% in 1980,
therefore
there is a remarkable
change
in the
environment
of
living
. Meanwhile, education received the highest recognition in 2010,
however
, the proportion of
good
of it emerged a slight drop to 72%, and
living
environment
was in excess of it.

Otherwise
, from 1980 on wards, the medical services and employment opportunities have a similar trend, showing
a consider
increase of
good
by 10%, which were both 63% in 1980.
So
, the
bad
attitude to them are decline
notably
. (8% and 10%
respectively
in 2010) By contrast, the decrease of the
positive
attitude toward shops and public transport were noticeable during the period.
Particularly
, the transport of public
saw
a
dramatically decline
to 38%.

Overall
, there were considerable improvements to
living
environment
, medical service and employment opportunities in this city,
but
the figures for other aspects of life
saw
a decline in 2010.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The tables show results of surveys about how people in a city felt about different aspect of their lives in 1980 and 2010. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
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