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Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v.2

Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v. 2
This essay is about the the advantages and disadvantages of the university students who live with their families and the ones who live away from their homes because their universities are in different place. As one can say it isn’t about the where the student lives but its about the knowledge that they acquire and it is also highly arguable that where the students live also has many advantages as well as disadvantages. The advantages and disadvantages of both situations are given below. The students who live away from their home because their universities are in different places are having a lot of advantages and it is most suggested by experienced elders that students should go to different place (away from their homes) to study their higher education as they will learn a lot of life lessons which isn’t possible to have learned it while sitting at their homes. One of the biggest advantages is that they learn to live by themselves and to survive the open world. The disadvantages are that, they don’t get their emotional support of their loved ones being around them and also that it is also very easy for them to get into the wrong path in life. Meanwhile the students who live with their families aren’t experiencing any less, their advantages are that they have emotional support at the nearest and many more. The disadvantages are that, their home and family becomes a comfort place and tend relay more on their family rather than on themselves. In conclusion, I’d like to say that it doesn’t matter where they live, it matters who they choose to be.
This essay is about
the the
advantages
and disadvantages of the university
students
who

live
with their
families
and the
ones
who
live
away from their
homes
because
their

universities
are in
different
place.
As
one can say it isn’t about the where the
student
lives


but
its about the knowledge that they acquire and it is
also
highly
arguable that where the

students
live
also
has
many
advantages
as well
as disadvantages. The
advantages
and


disadvantages
of both situations are
given
below.

The
students
who
live
away from their home
because
their universities are in
different


places are having
a lot of
advantages
and it is most suggested by experienced elders that

students should go to
different
place (away from their
homes)
to study their higher

education as they will learn
a lot of
life lessons which isn’t possible to have learned it

while
sitting at their
homes
. One of the biggest
advantages
is that they learn to
live
by


themselves
and to survive the open world. The disadvantages are that, they don’t
get


their emotional support of their
loved
ones
being around them and
also
that it is
also
very


easy
for them to
get
into the
wrong
path in life.

Meanwhile
the
students
who
live
with their
families
aren’t experiencing any less, their

advantages
are that they have emotional support at the nearest and
many
more. The

disadvantages are that, their home and
family
becomes a comfort place and tend relay

more
on their
family
rather
than on themselves.
In conclusion
, I’d like to say that it doesn’
t


matter
where they
live
, it matters
who
they choose to be.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS academic Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v. 2

Academic
  American English
19 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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