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The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007. v.1

The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007. v. 1
The line graph demonstrates the passenger activities on the Toronto Metro System for a week in July 2007. The x-axis of the graph shows different hours of the day while the y-axis gives the number of passengers in thousands. Overall, it is apparent from the line graph that the highest number of passengers used the Toronto Metro System at 8 in the morning and 6 in the evening. As can be seen, the activity at Toronto Metro Station begins at 6 in the morning with the rush of 100 thousand people and a fairly similar pattern can be noticed at 4 in the evening. The Toronto Metro, in these two hours, received the lowest number of travellers. The passengers rushed in during 8 in the morning and 400 thousand of them were in this metro at that time. A similar number of passenger used this subway at 6 in the evening. Moreover, with a drastic downfall, the travellers' number reached to about 200 thousand at 10 in the morning. Moving further, after a climb to 300 thousand passengers at 12 in the noon, it stabilization till 2 pm before a significant fall at 4 pm. However, afterwards, the number kept on increasing before reaching to approximately 400, 000 at 6 in the evening. From that point, fewer passengers used the Metro and at 10 pm there were roughly 150, 000 travellers present on the Metro System.
The line graph demonstrates the
passenger
activities on the Toronto
Metro
System for a week in July 2007. The x-axis of the graph
shows
different
hours of the day while the y-axis gives the
number
of
passengers
in thousands.
Overall
, it is apparent from the line graph that the highest
number
of
passengers
used
the Toronto
Metro
System at 8 in the
morning
and 6 in the evening.

As can be
seen
, the activity at Toronto
Metro
Station
begins
at 6 in the
morning
with the rush of 100 thousand
people
and a
fairly
similar pattern can
be noticed
at 4 in the evening. The Toronto
Metro
, in these two hours, received the lowest
number
of
travellers
. The
passengers
rushed in during 8 in the
morning
and 400 thousand of them were in this
metro
at that time. A similar
number
of
passenger
used
this subway at 6 in the evening.
Moreover
, with a drastic downfall, the
travellers
'
number
reached to about 200 thousand at 10 in the
morning
. Moving
further
, after a climb to 300 thousand
passengers
at 12 in the noon,
it
stabilization till 2 pm
before
a significant fall at 4 pm.
However
, afterwards, the
number
kept
on increasing
before
reaching to approximately 400, 000 at 6 in the evening. From that point, fewer
passengers
used
the
Metro
and at 10 pm there were roughly 150, 000
travellers
present on the
Metro
System.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the weekday volume of passenger activity on the Toronto Metro system for July 2007. v. 1

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