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The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. v.2

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. v. 2
The pie chart illustrates the national expenditure of the United Arab Emirates in 2000. Generally speaking, the UAE government spent over 300 billion United Arab Emirates Dirham (AED) on different sectors in this year and the highest proportion of this expenditure went on ensuring the social security of citizens. To maintain the social soundness, the UAE government spent 100 billion AED, the highest, whilst, the transportation system received only 9 billion, the lowest budget allocation in this year. Besides, healthcare and personal social services demanded over 50 billion AED which was even higher than the cumulative budget allocation for the education and defence sectors in the UAE in 2000. The industrial, agricultural and employment sector received 13 billion AED which was 4 billion fewer than the national budget for the law and order sector. Moreover, the government contributed 23 billion in debt interest and 15 billion for the housing, heritage and environment sectors. All other expenditure summed up at 23 billion and it is obvious that the government paid overhead to ensure social security compared to other aspects of the country.
The pie chart illustrates the national expenditure of the United Arab Emirates in 2000.
Generally
speaking, the UAE
government
spent over 300
billion
United Arab Emirates
Dirham
(AED) on
different
sectors
in this year and the highest proportion of this expenditure went on ensuring the
social
security of citizens.

To maintain the
social
soundness, the UAE
government
spent 100
billion
AED, the highest, whilst, the transportation system received
only
9
billion
, the lowest budget allocation in this year.
Besides
, healthcare and personal
social
services demanded over 50
billion
AED which was even higher than the cumulative budget allocation for the education and
defence
sectors
in the UAE in 2000.

The industrial, agricultural and employment
sector
received 13
billion
AED which was 4
billion
fewer than the national budget for the law and order
sector
.
Moreover
, the
government
contributed 23
billion
in debt interest and 15
billion
for the housing, heritage and environment
sectors
. All other expenditure summed up at 23
billion
and it is obvious that the
government
paid overhead to ensure
social
security compared to other aspects of the country.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. v. 2

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