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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v.3

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 3
The given line graph compares the unemployment rates in the USA and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999. As an overall trend, the USA succeeded to decrease its unemployment rate over the time while the scenario was completely reverse in Japan despite its initial ignorable rate of unemployment. As can be seen from the given illustration, the unemployment rate in the USA was just over 7% in March 1993 while it was less than 2. 5% in Japan. However, this rate kept on decreasing in the USA while it went up in Japan. In two years, the percentage of jobless Americans fall to just below 5. 5% while it increased in Japan and stood at 3. 0% at the same time. The opposite trend of the line graph depicts that unemployment rate in the USA gradually declined while increased in the case of Japan. The rates of joblessness in these two countries intersected between March 1998 and March 1999 when the unemployment rate in both countries was just about 4. 5%. At the end of 1998, the percentage of unemployment among the Americans became less than that of Japan. The data presents that jobless people’s percentage in the USA was just above 4. 0 in 1999 while this rate in Japan reached to over 4. 5% which was more than double than the initial rate of their unemployment.
The
given
line graph compares the
unemployment
rates
in the USA and
Japan
from March 1993 to March 1999. As an
overall
trend, the USA succeeded to decrease its
unemployment
rate
over the time while the scenario was completely reverse in
Japan
despite its initial ignorable
rate
of unemployment.

As can be
seen
from the
given
illustration, the
unemployment
rate
in the USA was
just
over 7% in March 1993 while it was less than 2. 5% in
Japan
.
However
, this
rate
kept
on decreasing in the USA while it went up in
Japan
. In two years, the percentage of jobless Americans fall to
just
below 5. 5% while it increased in
Japan
and stood at 3. 0% at the same time. The opposite trend of the line graph depicts that
unemployment
rate
in the USA
gradually
declined while increased in the case of
Japan
. The
rates
of joblessness in these two countries intersected between March 1998 and March 1999 when the
unemployment
rate
in both countries was
just
about 4. 5%. At the
end
of 1998, the percentage of
unemployment
among the Americans became less than that of
Japan
. The data presents that jobless
people
’s percentage in the USA was
just
above 4. 0 in 1999 while this
rate
in
Japan
reached to over 4. 5% which was more than double than the initial
rate
of their
unemployment
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 3

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