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The flowchart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory Write a report for a university tutor describing the production process v.2

The flowchart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory Write a report for a university tutor describing the production process v. 2
The flowchart illustrates the process of how to produce colored paper clips in a small factory. Overall, there are five steps involved in the process, beginning with selecting the material molten plastic and ending with sending the product of clips out from the factory by packing and despatch. To begin, molten plastic is poured into moulds distinguished three different colors; which are red, blue and yellow. Moving to the second step, these clips are then checked for strength in a quality control system. Also, at this step, the machine will reject unsatisfactory clips. In the third step, workers in the factory sort all these clips manually by hand, putting mixed coloured clips in a group and single coloured clips into another group. After the third step is completed, two types of coloured clips will be checked again in a quality control system to make sure that they are put into groups correctly. Finally, the process ends by packing and delivery to markets.
The flowchart illustrates the process of how to produce colored paper
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clips
in a
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small
factory.
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, there are five
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steps
involved in the process, beginning with selecting the material molten plastic and ending with sending the product of
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clips
out from the factory by packing and despatch.

To
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begin
, molten plastic
is poured
into
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moulds
distinguished three
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different
colors; which
are red
, blue and yellow. Moving to the second
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step
, these
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clips
are then
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checked
for strength in a quality control system.
Also
, at this
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step
, the machine will reject unsatisfactory
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clips
. In the third
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step
, workers in the factory sort all these
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clips
manually
by hand, putting mixed
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coloured
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clips
in a group and single
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coloured
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clips
into another group. After the third
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step
is completed
, two types of
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coloured
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clips
will be
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checked
again in a quality control system to
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make
sure that they
are put
into groups
correctly
.
Finally
, the process ends by packing and delivery to markets.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The flowchart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory Write a report for a university tutor describing the production process v. 2

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
162 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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