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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v.2

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 2
The given line graph compares the proportion of unemployed people in the US and Japan through the period from March 1993 to March 1999. It is obvious that the unemployment rates of these two countries changed oppositely. The percentage of the US tended to decrease over the years. However, at the same time, unfortunately, Japan witnessed the rapid growth in the rates. Nevertheless, in 1999, both nations almost had the same percentage, which means the lowest figures of the US were equal to the highest ones of Japan. In March 1993, the proportion of unemployment in the US was a bit off 7% whereas that of Japan was about 2. 5%. It was marked in 1998 when Japan's rate reached the highest point of approximately 5. 2%. The contradiction happened to the US: its rate went to the lowest of 4. 8%. Although the processes of figures changing of these countries were totally opposite, the last numbers, amazingly, turned out to be extremely close. In March 1999, the rates of unemployment in the USA and Japan stood still at about 5. 1% and 4. 9% respectively.
The
given
line graph compares the proportion of unemployed
people
in the US and
Japan
through the period from March 1993 to March 1999. It is obvious that the unemployment
rates
of these two countries
changed
oppositely
.

The percentage of the US tended to decrease over the years.
However
, at the same time, unfortunately,
Japan
witnessed the rapid growth in the
rates
.
Nevertheless
, in 1999, both nations almost had the same percentage, which means the lowest figures of the US were equal to the highest ones of Japan.

In March 1993, the proportion of unemployment in the US was a bit off 7% whereas that of
Japan
was about 2. 5%. It
was marked
in 1998 when Japan's
rate
reached the highest point of approximately 5. 2%. The contradiction happened to the US: its
rate
went to the lowest of 4. 8%.

Although the processes of figures changing of these countries were
totally
opposite, the last numbers,
amazingly
, turned out to be
extremely
close. In March 1999, the
rates
of unemployment in the USA and
Japan
stood
still
at about 5. 1% and 4. 9%
respectively
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 2

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186 words
6.5
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