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The graph below shows the student involvement in three sports in a school based on which grades they are studying in. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.4

The graph below shows the student involvement in three sports in a school based on which grades they are studying in.
The provided column graph illustrates the engagement of students in three distinct sports during their study. The vertical axis represents the proportion of pupils in divergent sports and the horizontal axis indicates about the eight to ten grades in a school. Turning to class eight grader, near about 60% students have great interest to play a cricket game as compare to others but when it comes to the cricket and basketball, both the sports are approximately played constant just only with the difference of 5%. Furthermore, in the ninth class, 45% students are in the favor of cricket and this is 15% higher than the soccer players as well as the least difference of 20% can be clearly seen in the basketball sport. Finally, grade ten students show their less interest to play basketball sport and the cricket sport is highly considerable by 40% tenth graders. Overall, it is evident that the cricket is the favorite sport among all the graders while the basketball has less significance than other sports.
The provided column graph illustrates the engagement of
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students
in three distinct
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sports
during their study. The vertical axis represents the proportion of pupils in divergent
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sports
and the horizontal axis indicates about the eight to ten grades in a school.

Turning to
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class
eight grader, near about 60%
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students
have great interest to play a
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cricket
game as compare to others
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but
when it
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comes
to the
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cricket
and
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basketball
, both the
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sports
are approximately played constant
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just
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only
with the difference of 5%.
Furthermore
, in the ninth
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class
, 45%
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students
are in the favor of
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cricket
and this is 15% higher than the soccer players
as well
as the least difference of 20% can be
clearly
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seen
in the
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basketball
sport.

Finally
, grade ten
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students
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show
their less interest to play
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basketball
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sport
and the
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cricket
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sport
is
highly
considerable by 40% tenth graders.

Overall
, it is evident that the
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cricket
is the favorite
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sport
among all the graders while the
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basketball
has less significance than other
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sports
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the student involvement in three sports in a school based on which grades they are studying in.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
170 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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