The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. v.2
The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. v. 2
The line graph presents data on the male and female smokers per thousand people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. As an overall trend, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased over the time while the female smokers’ rate increase in the given period of time.
According to the given line graph, the ratio of male smokers in Someland was much higher than that of females in 1960. 600 men out of 1000, smoked in this year while the ratio of women smokers was less than 100 per thousand. However, the male smokers’ percentage kept on decreasing steadily over the time and an opposite trend could be observed among the women. After 20 years the percentages or male and female smoker in Someland were 48% and 31% respectively. Finally, in 2000, the percentages of male and female smokers became almost the same. In 2000, the male smokers’ ratio was 20%, which was a significant decline in the ratio of the male smoker, while it was 20% for women, which shows that the percentage of female ration doubled in 40 years.
The line graph presents data on the male and
female
smokers per thousand
people
in
Someland
from 1960 to 2000. As an
overall
trend, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased over the time while the
female
smokers’ rate increase in the
given
period of time.
According to the
given
line graph, the
ratio
of male smokers in
Someland
was much higher than that of
females
in 1960. 600
men
out of 1000, smoked in this year while the
ratio
of women smokers was less than 100 per thousand.
However
, the male smokers’
percentage
kept
on decreasing
steadily
over the time and an opposite trend could
be observed
among the women. After 20 years the
percentages
or male and
female
smoker in
Someland
were 48% and 31%
respectively
.
Finally
, in 2000, the
percentages
of male and
female
smokers became almost the same. In 2000, the male smokers’
ratio
was 20%, which was a significant decline in the
ratio
of the male smoker, while it was 20% for women, which
shows
that the
percentage
of
female
ration doubled in 40 years.
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