The ratio of smokers among men and women in Someland is outlined in the line graph and the data also shows how this rate changed over a 40 years’ time. It is obvious that the ratio of smokers in Someland dipped over the time but female smokers’ percentage climbed higher.
As is visible in the illustration, almost six in ten men smoked in 1960 in Someland. At that time one female out of then smoked but over the decades this ratio went higher while the percentage of male smokers decreased. In 1970, almost 2 in every ten women smoked while male smokers’ ratio somewhat decreased. Moving further, the percentages of male and female smokers in 1985 stood at 40% and 30%, which shows a contrasting trend of smoking between men and women. It is obvious that more females started consuming tobacco in 1985 than any other time in the past. However, the smoking rate among both genders gradually decreased after 1985 and in 2000, almost 20 to 25 male and female in Someland smoked. Though more males in Someland smoked, the increasing trend of the female smokers was somewhat alarming.
The
ratio
of smokers among
men
and women in
Someland
is outlined
in the line graph and the data
also
shows
how this rate
changed
over a 40 years’
time
. It is obvious that the
ratio
of smokers in
Someland
dipped over the
time
but
female
smokers’ percentage climbed higher.
As is visible in the illustration, almost six in ten
men
smoked
in 1960 in
Someland
. At that
time
one
female
out of then
smoked
but
over the decades this
ratio
went higher while the percentage of male smokers decreased. In 1970, almost 2 in every ten women
smoked
while male smokers’
ratio
somewhat decreased. Moving
further
, the percentages of male and
female
smokers in 1985 stood at 40% and 30%, which
shows
a contrasting trend of smoking between
men
and women. It is obvious that more
females
started
consuming tobacco in 1985 than any other
time
in the past.
However
, the smoking rate among both genders
gradually
decreased after 1985 and in 2000, almost 20 to 25 male and
female
in
Someland
smoked
. Though more
males
in
Someland
smoked
, the increasing trend of the
female
smokers was somewhat alarming.
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