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The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v.1

The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v. 1
The provided bar graph shows sales data of Woodland chocolate for the year 2010. As is observed from the given data, Wachi Bar was the most sold chocolate bar in the first quarter of the year while the popularity of Woody bar increased over the time for the given year. According to the given bar graph, from January to March around 19 million Wuzzle chocolate bars were sold in Woodland. During this period Wachi chocolate bar was the most sold chocolate which was sold more than 55 million bars. The Wozic was the second most sold chocolate bar during this first quarter with more than 45 million sales volumes. The woody bar was the least sold item for this quarter with only 10 million sales. In the second quarter, the sales volume for all these four chocolate bars were around 20 million. Interestingly in the third quarter, both Wachi and Wozic chocolate sales volume decreased to 10 million while the Wuzzle and Woody bars’ sales increased to 40 and 30 million respectively. In the final quarter, the sales volume for Wachi chocolate bar remained unchanged as it was in the third quarter while the Woody bars’ sales volume increased by 10 million compared to the previous month. In this final quarter, the Woody bar was the highest sold chocolate type and the sales volume of this bar increased throughout the year. The Wachi bar and the Wozic bar were sold around 20 and 35 million in the final quarter. In summary, there was a common pattern of the sales volumes of the four chocolate types for the year 2010 except that the sales amount of Woody bar increased in each quarter while this volume decreased for the Wachi bar.
The provided bar graph
shows
sales
data of Woodland chocolate for the
year
2010. As
is observed
from the
given
data,
Wachi
Bar was the most sold chocolate bar in the
first
quarter
of the
year
while the popularity of Woody bar
increased
over the time for the
given
year.

According to the
given
bar graph, from January to March around 19
million
Wuzzle
chocolate bars
were sold
in Woodland. During this period
Wachi
chocolate bar was the most sold chocolate which
was sold
more than 55
million
bars. The
Wozic
was the second most sold chocolate bar during this
first
quarter
with more than 45
million
sales
volumes
. The woody bar was the least sold item for this
quarter
with
only
10
million
sales
. In the second
quarter
, the
sales
volume
for all these four chocolate bars were around 20
million
.
Interestingly
in the third
quarter
, both
Wachi
and
Wozic
chocolate
sales
volume
decreased to 10
million
while the
Wuzzle
and Woody bars’
sales
increased
to 40 and 30
million
respectively
. In the final
quarter
, the
sales
volume
for
Wachi
chocolate bar remained unchanged as it was in the third
quarter
while the Woody bars’
sales
volume
increased
by 10
million
compared to the previous month. In this final
quarter
, the Woody bar was the highest sold chocolate type and the
sales
volume
of this bar
increased
throughout the
year
. The
Wachi
bar and the
Wozic
bar
were sold
around 20 and 35
million
in the final quarter.

In summary, there was a common pattern of the
sales
volumes
of the four chocolate types for the
year
2010 except that the
sales
amount of Woody bar
increased
in each
quarter
while this
volume
decreased for the
Wachi
bar.
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46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v. 1

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