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The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v.1

The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v. 1
The provided bar graph shows sales data of Woodland chocolate for the year 2010. As is observed from the given data, Wachi Bar was the most sold chocolate bar in the first quarter of the year while the popularity of Woody bar increased over the time for the given year. According to the given bar graph, from January to March around 19 million Wuzzle chocolate bars were sold in Woodland. During this period Wachi chocolate bar was the most sold chocolate which was sold more than 55 million bars. The Wozic was the second most sold chocolate bar during this first quarter with more than 45 million sales volumes. The woody bar was the least sold item for this quarter with only 10 million sales. In the second quarter, the sales volume for all these four chocolate bars were around 20 million. Interestingly in the third quarter, both Wachi and Wozic chocolate sales volume decreased to 10 million while the Wuzzle and Woody bars’ sales increased to 40 and 30 million respectively. In the final quarter, the sales volume for Wachi chocolate bar remained unchanged as it was in the third quarter while the Woody bars’ sales volume increased by 10 million compared to the previous month. In this final quarter, the Woody bar was the highest sold chocolate type and the sales volume of this bar increased throughout the year. The Wachi bar and the Wozic bar were sold around 20 and 35 million in the final quarter. In summary, there was a common pattern of the sales volumes of the four chocolate types for the year 2010 except that the sales amount of Woody bar increased in each quarter while this volume decreased for the Wachi bar.
The provided bar graph
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shows
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sales
data of Woodland chocolate for the
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year
2010. As
is observed
from the
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given
data,
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Wachi
Bar was the most sold chocolate bar in the
first
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quarter
of the
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year
while the popularity of Woody bar
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increased
over the time for the
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year.

According to the
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bar graph, from January to March around 19
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million
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Wuzzle
chocolate bars
were sold
in Woodland. During this period
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Wachi
chocolate bar was the most sold chocolate which
was sold
more than 55
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million
bars. The
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Wozic
was the second most sold chocolate bar during this
first
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quarter
with more than 45
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million
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sales
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volumes
. The woody bar was the least sold item for this
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quarter
with
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only
10
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million
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sales
. In the second
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quarter
, the
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sales
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volume
for all these four chocolate bars were around 20
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million
.
Interestingly
in the third
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, both
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Wachi
and
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Wozic
chocolate
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sales
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volume
decreased to 10
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million
while the
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Wuzzle
and Woody bars’
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sales
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increased
to 40 and 30
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million
respectively
. In the final
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quarter
, the
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sales
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volume
for
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Wachi
chocolate bar remained unchanged as it was in the third
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quarter
while the Woody bars’
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sales
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volume
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increased
by 10
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million
compared to the previous month. In this final
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quarter
, the Woody bar was the highest sold chocolate type and the
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sales
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volume
of this bar
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increased
throughout the
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year
. The
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Wachi
bar and the
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Wozic
bar
were sold
around 20 and 35
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million
in the final quarter.

In summary, there was a common pattern of the
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sales
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volumes
of the four chocolate types for the
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year
2010 except that the
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sales
amount of Woody bar
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increased
in each
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quarter
while this
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volume
decreased for the
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Wachi
bar.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the quarterly sales figures of Woodward chocolate bars for 2010. v. 1

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