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The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. v.3

The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. v. 3
The given line graph compares the consumption of main renewable energy sources in the United States of America from the year 1949 to 2008. As is observed from the graph, initially in 1950 about 3 quadrillions BTU of total renewable energy was used in the USA and this amount reached to about 8 quadrillions BTU in 2008. As is presented in the line graph, wood and hydroelectric power were the two sources of renewable energy in the USA in 1950 and total 3 quadrillion BTU energies were consumed in the USA in this year. The consumption of renewable energy in the USA kept increasing each year with some fluctuations. In the year 2008, the consumption reached to around 8 quadrillions BTU. Until 1982, wood and hydroelectric powers were the two main sources of renewable energy and these 2 sources provided the renewable energy for the USA people. After 1982, Biofuels and wind power were introduced as renewable energy sources and after then the usages of these two sources keep increasing. In conclusion, in earlier states, the wood and hydroelectric power were the main sources of renewable energy in the USA and after 2005, the usages of Bio-fuel and wind increased while the total consumption of renewable energy in the USA increased over time.
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given
line graph compares the
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consumption
of main
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renewable
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energy
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sources
in the United States of America from the
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year
1949 to 2008. As
is observed
from the graph,
initially
in 1950 about 3 quadrillions BTU of total
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renewable
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energy
was
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used
in the USA and this amount reached to about 8 quadrillions BTU in 2008.

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is presented
in the line graph, wood and hydroelectric
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power
were the two
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sources
of
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renewable
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energy
in the USA in 1950 and total 3 quadrillion BTU
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energies
were consumed
in the USA in this
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year
. The
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consumption
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renewable
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energy
in the USA
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kept
increasing each
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year
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some
fluctuations. In the
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2008, the
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consumption
reached to around 8 quadrillions BTU.

Until 1982, wood and hydroelectric
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powers
were the two main
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sources
of
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renewable
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energy
and these 2
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provided the
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renewable
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energy
for the USA
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people
. After 1982, Biofuels and wind
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power
were introduced
as
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renewable
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energy
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sources
and after then the usages of these two
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sources
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keep
increasing.

In conclusion
, in earlier states, the wood and hydroelectric
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were the main
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sources
of
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renewable
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energy
in the USA and after 2005, the usages of Bio-fuel and wind increased while the total
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consumption
of
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renewable
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energy
in the USA increased over time.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the consumption of renewable energy in the USA from 1949-2008. v. 3

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213 words
6.5
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