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The graph show below the air conditioning unit sales in two different countries over amounts between April 2010 and October 2010. v.2

The graph show below the air conditioning unit sales in two different countries over amounts between April 2010 and October 2010. v. 2
The bar graph highlight the number of air conditioning unit were sold in Australia and Uk over a seven months period from April to October 2010. Overall, what stand out graph is that in general, while Australia AC sales witnessed a decline before rising after July, the number of AC unit sold in the month of may these two countries purchased an equal number of air conditioning units. With regarding to the sales of AC in UK month of April was collape up. about 45 thousands. In the month of June sales were surprisingly changed. Furthermore, April and September was remainly constant and in last months sales were go down. Turning to, Australia were country which sold the maximum AC in month of April it was near about 3 thousand sale. Afterward four months slightly decline. Additionally in July sales reached at least the 1000. Next in August it cross the 3 thousand remarkably changed in the sales. Finally then, in October sales were reached at the top level at 5 thousand.
The bar graph highlight the number of air conditioning unit
were sold
in Australia and
Uk
over a seven
months
period from April to October 2010.

Overall
, what stand out graph is that
in general
, while Australia AC
sales
witnessed a decline
before
rising after July, the number of AC unit sold in the
month
of may these two countries
purchased
an equal number of air conditioning units.

With
regarding to
the
sales
of AC in UK
month
of April was
collape
up. about 45 thousands. In the
month
of June
sales
were
surprisingly
changed
.
Furthermore
, April and September was
remainly
constant and in last months

sales
were
go
down.

Turning to, Australia were country which sold the maximum AC in
month
of April it was near about 3 thousand
sale
. Afterward four
months
slightly
decline.
Additionally
in July
sales
reached at least the 1000.
Next
in August it
cross
the 3 thousand
remarkably
changed
in the
sales
.
Finally
then, in October
sales
were reached
at the
top level
at 5 thousand.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph show below the air conditioning unit sales in two different countries over amounts between April 2010 and October 2010. v. 2

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172 words
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