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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v.5

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 5
The provided line graph reveals information about the figures of commodities transported in the UK from 1974 until 2002 by using four kinds of transportation. Those transportations were roads, water, rail and pipelines. In general, most of the goods transported via those transportation systems unveiled positive trends which increased gradually for 28 years. It can be seen that the highest amount of commodities transported was shown by land transportation which was around 70 million tonnes in 1974 to approximately 100 million tonnes in 2002. As a result, it can be stated as a huge improvement among other mentioned transportation. In the second place, there was water transportation which gained about 20 million tonnes of goods in the observed years. Furthermore, the fluctuation trend came from rail transportation. In 1974, the usage of the train for transporting goods was quite similar with water transportation about 40 million tones; however, during the following years, it gave a tiny increase. Subsequently, pipeline carried the lowest amount of supplies in 1974 which was around 10 million tons. After that, this mode of transport brought promising improvement until in 1994 which remained steadily above 20 million tones.
The provided line graph reveals information about the figures of commodities transported in the UK from 1974 until 2002 by using four kinds of
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transportation
. Those
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transportations
were roads, water, rail and pipelines.
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, most of the
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goods
transported via those
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systems unveiled
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positive
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for 28 years.

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that the highest amount of commodities transported
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transportation
which was around 70
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million
tonnes in 1974 to approximately 100
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million
tonnes in 2002.
As a result
, it can
be stated
as a huge improvement among other mentioned
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transportation
. In the second place, there was water
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transportation
which gained about 20
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million
tonnes of
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goods
in the observed years.

Furthermore
, the fluctuation trend came from rail
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transportation
. In 1974, the usage of the train for transporting
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goods
was quite similar with water
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transportation
about 40
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million
tones;
however
, during the following years, it gave a tiny increase.
Subsequently
, pipeline carried the lowest amount of supplies in 1974 which was around 10
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million
tons. After that, this mode of transport brought promising improvement until in 1994 which remained
steadily
above 20
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million
tones.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 5

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