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The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v.3

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v. 3
These two diagrams reveal the flow diagrams of both cement and concrete production processes with necessary equipment and materials that are used. Mainly, both processes have similarities and differences. They are similar because each of them has more than one input and a single output. On the other hand, they differ in the number of production steps. In the cement production diagram, firstly, limestone and clay are gathered and passed through a crusher. Then, the powder obtained from crusher is moved to the mixer to make a homogene mixture. Next, rotating heater welcomes the material from the mixer. After heating step, resulting material flows on the grinder. Finally, cement becomes ready to be packed in bags at the end of the grinder. In the concrete production diagram, the process contains only one step to have concrete material that is mixing. Cement, water, sand and gravel which is a general name for small stones are all mixed in a rotating concrete mixer in precise proportions such as 15%, 10%, 25% and 50% respectively.
These two diagrams reveal the flow diagrams of both
cement
and concrete
production
processes with necessary equipment and
materials
that are
used
.
Mainly
, both processes have similarities and differences. They are similar
because
each of them has more than one input and a single output.
On the other hand
, they differ in the number of
production
steps.

In the
cement
production
diagram,
firstly
, limestone and clay
are gathered
and passed through a crusher. Then, the powder obtained from crusher is
moved
to the mixer to
make
a
homogene
mixture.
Next
, rotating heater welcomes the
material
from the mixer. After heating step, resulting
material
flows on the grinder.
Finally
,
cement
becomes ready to
be packed
in bags at the
end
of the grinder.

In the concrete
production
diagram, the process contains
only
one step to have concrete
material
that is
mixing.
Cement
, water, sand and gravel which is a general name for
small
stones are all mixed in a rotating concrete mixer in precise proportions such as 15%, 10%, 25% and 50%
respectively
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. v. 3

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