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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v.4

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 4
The supplied line graph outlines the goods transportation in the UK from 1974 to 2002 through various modes of transportation namely road, water, rail and pipeline. In general, the quantities of materials transported increased in all types of transportation types over the years. Looking at the details, goods brought through road transport swelled significantly from about 70 million tons in 1974 to about 95 million tons in 2002, approximately 25 million tons higher than in 1974. The same trend was true for both water and pipeline goods carrying. Water shipping distributed about 39 million tons of materials in 1974 and about 62 million tons in 2002. Pipeline showed the same trend despite the figure of goods carried was roughly slower than water transport, pipeline media only moved about 2 million tons in 1974 and about 21 million tons in 2002. In contrast, the number of commodities brought through rail mode fluctuated gradually. It was about 40 million tons in 1974 and went down modestly by the year of 1978 and this quantity fluctuated until it levelled up to about 41 million tons in 2002. It accounted a small change indeed, only about 1 million tons over the years.
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transportation in the UK from 1974 to 2002 through various modes of transportation
namely
road,
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water
, rail and pipeline.
In general
, the quantities of materials transported increased in all types of transportation types over the years.

Looking at the
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,
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goods
brought through road transport swelled
significantly
from about 70
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million
tons in 1974 to about 95
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million
tons in 2002, approximately 25
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million
tons higher than in 1974. The same trend was true for both
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water
and pipeline
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goods
carrying.
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Water
shipping distributed about 39
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million
tons of materials in 1974 and about 62
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million
tons in 2002. Pipeline
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showed
the same trend despite the figure of
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goods
carried was roughly slower than
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water
transport, pipeline media
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moved
about 2
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million
tons in 1974 and about 21
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million
tons in 2002.

In contrast
, the number of commodities brought through rail mode fluctuated
gradually
. It was about 40
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million
tons in 1974 and went down
modestly
by the year of 1978 and this quantity fluctuated until it levelled up to about 41
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million
tons in 2002. It accounted a
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small
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 4

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198 words
6.5
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