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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v.1

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. v. 1
A glance at the three given graphs reveals some differences among the expenditures per year of a British school in a period of three years: 1981, 1991, 2001. Overall, it can be seen that there are many trends that are obviously illustrated in those charts: upward, downward and both upward and downward. The changes of those features can be divided into two main groups on account of their trends: single trend and couple trends group. Starting with the first group, insurance and other workers’ salaries, in 1981, the insurance only took two percent of the total, however, in twenty years later, the number experienced a considerable growth of six percent to eight percent. Unlike the insurance, the salaries of other workers witnessed a respective drop from approximately thirty percent to a mere fifteen percent in about twenty years. Moving on to the second group, we can see that both teachers-salaries’ and resources’ proportions significantly fluctuated. In the first ten years of the period, the numbers rose five and ten percent to reach fifty and twenty percent, however, slipped dramatically in the next years from fifty to forty-five and from twenty to a mere nine percent. In contrast, furniture and equipment spending first experienced a decrease and then quickly climbed from five percent in 1991 to twenty percent, a growth of eighteen percent. It is interesting to note that through approximately twenty years, the total spending on different things of this UK school changed considerably.
A glance at the three
given
graphs reveals
some
differences among the expenditures per
year
of a British school in a period of three years: 1981, 1991, 2001.

Overall
, it can be
seen
that there are
many
trends
that are
obviously
illustrated in those charts: upward, downward and both upward and downward. The
changes
of those features can
be divided
into two main groups on account of their
trends
: single
trend
and couple
trends
group.

Starting with the
first
group, insurance and other workers’ salaries, in 1981, the insurance
only
took two
percent
of the total,
however
, in twenty years later, the number experienced a considerable growth of six
percent
to eight
percent
. Unlike the insurance, the salaries of other workers witnessed a respective drop from approximately thirty
percent
to a mere fifteen
percent
in about twenty years.

Moving on to the second group, we can
see
that both teachers-salaries’ and resources’ proportions
significantly
fluctuated. In the
first
ten years of the period, the numbers rose five and ten
percent
to reach fifty and twenty
percent
,
however
, slipped
dramatically
in the
next
years from fifty to forty-five and from twenty to a mere nine
percent
.
In contrast
, furniture and equipment spending
first
experienced a decrease and then
quickly
climbed from five
percent
in 1991 to twenty
percent
, a growth of eighteen percent.

It is interesting to note that through approximately twenty years, the total spending on
different
things of this UK school
changed
considerably
.
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