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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v.8

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 8
The provided illustration reveals data about the percentages of people who were elderly in three countries. This research was conducted to looking further information in three different nations; they were Japan, Sweden and USA. All of the samples were aged 65 and over, whereas, the data provide a view in the long term which is 100 years. Firstly, older population in Sweden and USA had a small difference in 1940 because they were both approximately 10% of the total population. These countries had a steady improvement for several years in terms of their number of elderly people. Meanwhile, they are predicted to have a similar result in 2040; their elder generation will rise around 25% in that year. Secondly, Japan was position as the lowest ranked nation in 1940 which had less old people than the other two countries. Over the year, Japan will have the largest proportion of elder people in the future. According to the given figures, Japan will notice an increase in 2020 to 2040 in terms of their elder generation proportion. It will put Japan to have an aged population with more than 25%. Lastly, all of the nations will have more proportion of elderly people in the coming years which indicate the enhanced life expectancy.
The provided illustration reveals data about the percentages of
people
who were elderly in three countries. This research
was conducted
to looking
further
information in three
different
nations; they were
Japan
, Sweden and USA.
All of the
samples
were aged
65 and over, whereas, the data provide a view in the long term which is 100 years.

Firstly
, older population in Sweden and USA had a
small
difference in 1940
because
they were both approximately 10% of the total population. These countries had a steady improvement for several years in terms of their number of elderly
people
. Meanwhile, they
are predicted
to have a similar result in 2040; their elder generation will rise around 25% in that year.

Secondly
,
Japan
was position as the lowest ranked nation in 1940 which had less
old
people
than the other two countries. Over the year,
Japan
will have the largest proportion of elder
people
in the future. According to the
given
figures,
Japan
will notice an increase in 2020 to 2040 in terms of their elder generation proportion. It will put
Japan
to have an aged population with more than 25%.

Lastly
,
all of the
nations will have more proportion of elderly
people
in the coming years which indicate the enhanced life expectancy.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 8

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