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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v.5

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 5
The line graph depicts the percentage of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years, over a century in three countries, namely- the United States, Sweden and Japan, from 1940 and also gives projection till 2040. A glance at the graph makes it clear that Japan will have more percentage of the aged population in the future despite its fewer percentage of this population in the early 40s and one-fourth of the world population will be older people in 2040. The illustration shows that the average old population in 1940 was between 5 to 10 percent in all the three countries and the USA had the highest percentage of aged people while it was lowest in Japan. The ageing population in the USA grew steadily and reached up to 15% in the year 2000. It is expected to be doubled and reach nearly 25% in 2040. Similarly, in Sweden, the percentage of aged people grew from about 7% in 1940 to 15% in 2000 and is heading towards 25% in 2040. In contrast, the aged population in Japan remained the lowest, which was less than 5% until 2005 and expected to grow and reach the highest point, about 30 percentage, in 2040. The graph clearly reveals that the ratio of aged population will increase in 2040 and almost one of every four citizens in these three countries would be over 65 years old in 2040.
The line graph depicts the
percentage
of senior citizens, who are older than 65 years, over a century in three countries,
namely
- the United States, Sweden and
Japan
, from 1940 and
also
gives projection till 2040. A glance at the graph
makes
it
clear
that
Japan
will have more
percentage
of the
aged
population
in the future despite its fewer
percentage
of this
population
in the early 40s and one-fourth of the world
population
will be older
people
in 2040.

The illustration
shows
that the average
old
population
in 1940 was
between 5 to 10
percent in all the three countries and the USA had the highest
percentage
of
aged
people
while it was lowest in
Japan
. The
ageing
population
in the USA grew
steadily
and reached up to 15% in the year 2000. It is
expected
to
be doubled
and reach
nearly
25% in 2040.
Similarly
, in Sweden, the
percentage
of
aged
people
grew from about 7% in 1940 to 15% in 2000 and is heading towards 25% in 2040.
In contrast
, the
aged
population
in
Japan
remained the lowest, which was less than 5% until 2005 and
expected
to grow and reach the highest point, about 30
percentage
, in 2040. The graph
clearly
reveals that the ratio of
aged
population
will increase in 2040 and almost one of every four citizens in these three countries would be over 65 years
old
in 2040.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 5

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