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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v.6

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 6
The line graph illustrates the percentage of citizens who aged 65 or above in three various nations from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it is clearly shown that the proportion of the population who aged 65 or above in the USA and Sweden increases from 1940 to 2040 with slight drops in between whereas that in Japan decreases starting from 1940 to 1980 before a sharp rise in the number of elderly people in that country. Initially, in 1940, there was a higher percentage of older people living in the USA (just below 10%) than Sweden (around 7%), it was then followed by Japan with only 5%. In the USA, there was an increasing trend in the proportion of elderly people from 1940 to 1980 and decreased slightly. However, it is predicted that the figure for this will eventually rise until 2040. A similar pattern can also be observed for the result obtained in Sweden, the figure for the percentage of older people increases from 1940 to 2040 with two gradual dips from 1980 to 1990 and from 2010 to 2025. Turning to Japan, it is apparent that there was a slight decline in the proportion of older people from 1940 to 1990 before it showed an upward trend. It is believed that the figure will soar dramatically from 2030 onwards and reached its peak in 2040. Lastly, Japan will become the country with most elderly people among the three nations and USA is the least.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of citizens who aged 65 or above in three various nations from 1940 to 2040.

Overall
, it is
clearly
shown that the proportion of the population who aged 65 or above in the USA and Sweden increases from 1940 to 2040 with slight drops in between whereas that in
Japan
decreases starting from 1940 to 1980
before
a sharp rise in the number of elderly
people
in that country.

Initially
, in 1940, there was a higher percentage of older
people
living in the USA (
just
below 10%) than Sweden (around 7%), it was then followed by
Japan
with
only
5%. In the USA, there was an increasing trend in the proportion of elderly
people
from 1940 to 1980 and decreased
slightly
.
However
, it
is predicted
that the figure for this will
eventually
rise until 2040. A similar pattern can
also
be observed
for the result obtained in Sweden, the figure for the percentage of older
people
increases from 1940 to 2040 with two gradual dips from 1980 to 1990 and from 2010 to 2025.

Turning to
Japan
, it is apparent that there was a slight decline in the proportion of older
people
from 1940 to 1990
before
it
showed
an upward trend. It
is believed
that the figure will soar
dramatically
from 2030 onwards and reached its peak in 2040.
Lastly
,
Japan
will become the country with most elderly
people
among the three nations and USA is the least.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 6

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