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The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v.3

The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v. 3
The diagrams show the number of international tourists who travelled to the UK, and British residents who travelled outside from 1979 to 1999. The data also presents the top 5 countries where UK citizens travelled in 1999. Overall, the number of international tourists travelling in the UK kept on increasing after 1989, and more UK people travelled outside the UK than the number of tourists the UK received. According to the graph, around 10 million international tourists travelled the UK. And the number of UK residents who travelled outside was 2-3 million more. Both of these numbers kept on increasing gradually till 1986 and after that, the number of UK citizens travelling outside increased very sharply. The number of tourists the UK received also kept on increasing and reached over 25 million in 1999 while more than 50 million people travelled outside. The number of UK travellers who went to other countries was roughly double than the number of people who came to the UK for visiting. The second bar graph shows the countries UK citizens travelled in 1999 and among them France was their favourite destination where more than 10% of tourists travelled in1999. The second most visited country by UK people was Spain where about 8% of total UK tourists travelled. Other countries visited by UK tourists were the USA, Greece and Turkey where less than 5% UK tourists travelled in 1999.
The diagrams
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tourists
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travelled
to the UK, and British residents
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travelled
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outside
from 1979 to 1999. The data
also
presents the top 5
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countries
where UK citizens
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travelled
in 1999.

Overall
, the
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number
of international
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tourists
travelling in the UK
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kept
on increasing after 1989, and more UK
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people
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travelled
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outside
the UK than the
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number
of
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tourists
the UK received.

According to the graph, around 10
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million
international
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tourists
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travelled
the UK. And the
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of UK residents
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who
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outside
was 2-3
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more. Both of these
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till 1986 and after that, the
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of UK citizens travelling
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increased
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the UK received
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million
in 1999 while more than 50
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travellers
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went to other
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countries
was roughly double than the
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who
came to the UK for visiting.

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The
second bar graph
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UK citizens
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in 1999 and among them France was their
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favourite
destination where more than 10% of
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tourists
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travelled
in1999.
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second most visited
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by UK
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was Spain where about 8% of total UK
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tourists
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travelled
. Other
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countries
visited by UK
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were the USA, Greece and Turkey where less than 5% UK
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tourists
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travelled
in 1999.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about travel to and from the UK, and about the most popular countries for UK residents to visit. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
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