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The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U S state of Oregon v.2

The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U S state of Oregon v. 2
The line chart depicts the changes in the population of three different countries in the U. S state of Oregon from 1940 to 2000. Overall, the number of people in all countries increased over the period of 60 years. It also clear that Washington had the highest number of residents, while the reverse is true for Columbia. In 1940, we can see from the chart, Washington had the highest number of people living, at 75. 000. This figure then rose gradually to 120. 000 in 1970. On the other hand, although standing at a lower number of 30. 000 at the beginning of the period, the population of Columbia also had grown to 45. 000 by 1970. Likewise, there was a slight increase in the population of Yamhill, increasing from just under to just over 30. 000 of people living in 1970. During 30 years later, it is interesting to note that, Washington' s population had risen sharply to 240. 000 of people at the end of the period. Washington, therefore, was still a country where had the most number of residents. Similarly, the population of both countries Columbia and Yamhill had grown steadily to 75. 000 and 90. 000 respectively.
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in the U. S state of Oregon from 1940 to 2000.
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increased over the period of 60 years. It
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In 1940, we can
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living, at 75. 000. This figure then rose
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of 30. 000 at the beginning of the period, the
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had grown to 45. 000 by 1970.
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Columbia and
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U S state of Oregon v. 2

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