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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. v.2

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. v. 2
The bar chart compares weekly expenditure of the British on three fast food items in 1990 while the line graph shows the consumption of these items from 1970 to 1990. Overall, expenditure on fast food varied based on people’s income and the pizza was the most consumed item in 70’s but in later years, consumption of fish & chips increased remarkably. According to the bar graph, high-income class people spent more money on the hamburger (more than 40 Pence/person) than on fish & chips and pizza. Their spending was also higher than average and low-income class people on fast food. Average income class people also spent more on hamburgers but their spending on fish and chips (25 pence) was more than other two income groups. Finally, the low-income class British citizens spent comparatively less on fast food items and fish& chips cost them most (about 17 pence). They spent the least amount on purchasing pizza (around 7 pence/person). On the other hand, the line graph shows the consumption of these items by the British from 1970 to 1990. Initially, pizza consumption in Britain was highest (300 gm/ person) in 1970. In this year, less than 80 gm of hamburger and fish & chips were consumed by an average person. Over the time, pizza consumption declined and fish & chips became the most consumed item in 1990 with 500 gm consumption per person.
The bar chart compares weekly expenditure of the British on three
fast
food
items
in 1990 while the line graph
shows
the
consumption
of these
items
from 1970 to 1990.
Overall
, expenditure on
fast
food
varied based on
people’s
income and the pizza was the most consumed
item
in
70’s
but
in later years,
consumption
of fish & chips increased
remarkably
.

According to the bar graph, high-income
class
people
spent
more money on the hamburger (more than 40 Pence/person) than on fish & chips and pizza. Their spending was
also
higher than average and low-income
class
people
on
fast
food
. Average income
class
people
also
spent
more on hamburgers
but
their spending on fish and chips (25 pence) was more than other two income groups.
Finally
, the low-income
class
British citizens
spent
comparatively
less on
fast
food
items
and
fish&
chips cost them most (about 17 pence). They
spent
the least amount on purchasing pizza (around 7 pence/person).

On the other hand
, the line graph
shows
the
consumption
of these
items
by the British from 1970 to 1990.
Initially
, pizza
consumption
in Britain was highest (300 gm/ person) in 1970. In this year, less than 80 gm of hamburger and fish & chips
were consumed
by an average person. Over the time, pizza
consumption
declined and fish & chips became the most consumed
item
in 1990 with 500 gm
consumption
per person.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast foods. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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