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The bar chart below shows the of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The bar chart below shows the of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
The given graph illustrates the proportion of Australian People from both gender among various age groups involving in regular physical activity in the year 2010. Comparison between men and women and People’s Age group ranges from 15 - 65 and above. Overall, Female had the highest proportion of being physically active compared to males. Maximum Physical activity can be observed in Female between ages of 45 - 54 and in males between ages 15 - 24. Men and women were least involved in physical activity in 35 - 44 and 15 - 24 years age group respectively. People in 15 - 24 years group, was the most active group. In 65 and over age groups, both gender had almost equal involvement in physical activity while other groups shows wide variation among genders. 53. 3% of women had the maximum regular physical activity between 45 - 54 age group. 52. 8% of men had the maximum regular physical activity between 15 - 24 age group. In males, steady decline can be observed from 15 - 44 years group followed by a gradual incline there after. On the contrary, Females had a progressive increase from 15 - 54 years and a slight dip there after.
The
given
graph illustrates the proportion of Australian
People
from both gender among various
age
groups
involving in regular
physical
activity
in the
year
2010. Comparison between
men
and women and
People
’s
Age
group
ranges
from 15 - 65
and above.

Overall
, Female had the highest proportion of being
physically
active compared to males. Maximum
Physical
activity
can
be observed
in Female between
ages
of
45 - 54
and in males between
ages
15 - 24
.
Men
and women were least involved in
physical
activity
in
35 - 44
and
15 - 24
years
age
group
respectively
.

People
in
15 - 24
years
group
, was the most active
group
. In 65 and over
age
groups
, both gender had almost equal involvement in
physical
activity
while other
groups
shows
wide variation among genders.

53. 3% of women had the maximum regular
physical
activity
between
45 - 54
age
group
. 52. 8% of
men
had the maximum regular
physical
activity
between
15 - 24
age
group.

In males, steady decline can
be observed
from 15 - 44
years
group
followed by a gradual incline
there after
.
On the contrary
, Females had a progressive increase
from 15 - 54
years and a slight dip
there after
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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