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The graph below shows the percentages of male and female US citizens who never married. v.1

The graph below shows the percentages of male and female US citizens who never married. v. 1
The line graph shows the percentages of American men and women who remained unmarried. The statistical data is presented from 1990 to 2010 and it clearly indicates that the proportion of such Americans gradually increased over the period and unmarried men’s ratio was higher than that of women. According to the illustration, more than one quarter adult males and one-fifth females were unmarried in 1990. This proportion slightly increased in the next decade when more than 25% male and 21% female were unmarried. The proportion of this single men and women in next five years rose at a higher pace than that of the last decade. Afterwards, the unmarried population in the USA surged more rapidly. Between 2008 and 2010 the ratio significantly increased compared to the previous growth from 1990 to 2005. In just 2 years after 2008, around 30% US males remained unmarried while the proportion of unmarried females was slightly less than that, roughly 24%. In summary, unmarried adult males’ ratio in America was higher than that of females and not marrying is a trend that accelerated noticeably faster from 2008 to 2010.
The line graph
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shows
the percentages of American
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men
and women who remained
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unmarried
. The statistical data
is presented
from 1990 to 2010 and it
clearly
indicates that the
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proportion
of such Americans
gradually
increased over the period and
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unmarried
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men
’s ratio was higher than that of women.

According to the illustration, more than one quarter adult
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males
and one-fifth
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females
were
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unmarried
in 1990. This
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proportion
slightly
increased in the
next
decade when more than 25% male and 21%
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female
were
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unmarried
. The
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proportion
of this single
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men
and women in
next
five years rose at a higher pace than that of the last decade. Afterwards, the
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unmarried
population in the USA surged more
rapidly
. Between 2008 and 2010 the ratio
significantly
increased compared to the previous growth from 1990 to 2005. In
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just
2 years after 2008, around 30% US
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males
remained
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unmarried
while the
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proportion
of
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unmarried
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females
was
slightly
less than that, roughly 24%.

In summary,
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unmarried
adult
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males’
ratio in America was higher than that of
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females
and not marrying is a trend that accelerated
noticeably
faster from 2008 to 2010.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentages of male and female US citizens who never married. v. 1

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3 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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