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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v.3

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 3
The bar chart compares two companies in Turkey in terms of their estimated sales of jeans next year. The pie chart illustrates the projected market share. Overall, it can be seen that the estimated sales of both companies will follow a similar trend of a general increase. Moreover, from the percentages shown in the pie chart, these two companies together are expected to possess half the total market share. The estimated sale of jeans of Mango Co. in January is 150 thousand of pairs. The figure for Jack& Jones Co. will be 450 thousand. Throughout the next 12 months, it is predicted that these figures will experience a sharp rise. In December, the sale of Mango Co. is estimated to be 600 thousand, 4 times higher than in January. The figure of Jack& Jones Co. will be 900 thousand, twice as much as itself in January. The pie chart shows that by the end of next year, these two companies are expected to possess half of the total market share, with the figure of Jack& Jones Co. being 30%, higher than the figure of 20% for Mango Co.
The bar
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compares two
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companies
in Turkey in terms of their
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estimated
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sales
of jeans
next
year. The pie
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chart
illustrates the projected market share.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the
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estimated
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sales
of both
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companies
will follow a similar trend of a general increase.
Moreover
, from the percentages shown in the pie
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chart
, these two
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companies
together are
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expected
to possess half the total market share.

The
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estimated
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sale
of jeans of Mango Co. in January is 150 thousand of pairs. The
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figure
for
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Jack&amp
; Jones Co. will be 450 thousand. Throughout the
next
12 months, it
is predicted
that these
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figures
will experience a sharp rise. In December, the
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sale
of Mango Co. is
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estimated
to be 600 thousand, 4 times higher than in January. The
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figure
of
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Jack&amp
; Jones Co. will be 900 thousand, twice as much as itself in January.

The pie
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shows
that by the
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end
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companies
are
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expected
to possess half of the total market share, with the
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figure
of
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Jack&amp
; Jones Co. being 30%, higher than the
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figure
of 20% for Mango Co.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 3

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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