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The graph below shows the percentage change in the nubmer of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006 alam re write v.2

The graph below shows the percentage change in the nubmer of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006 alam re write v. 2
The stipulated bar chart illustrates the percentage change in the number of overseas college goers graduating from universities in several states of Canada between 2001 and 2006. It was clear from the data that the state of New Brunswick outplayed all the other states with 7% and 11. 8% graduates in 2001 and 2006 respectively. Whereas the least number number of students were graduated from Ontario and Alberta province during 2001 and 2006, the figure were all time low of only 3% and 4. 2% respectively. A detailed view of the diagram reveals that, there was an upward trend in the number of graduates in 2006 in almost all the state universities except Alberta. Which showed an unexpected decline of 1. 5% as compared to 2001 figures(5. 8%) in terms of graduates number. Furthermore, all the states showed an increase of at least 2% as compared to 2001 figures. In conclusion it was evident that the number of foreign students in Canadian universities are increased in a steady manner over the period of time.
The stipulated bar chart illustrates the percentage
change
in the
number
of overseas college goers graduating from universities in several
states
of Canada between 2001 and 2006.

It was
clear
from the data that the
state
of New Brunswick outplayed all the other
states
with 7% and 11. 8% graduates in 2001 and 2006
respectively
. Whereas the least
number
number
of students
were graduated
from Ontario and Alberta province during 2001 and 2006, the figure were
all time
low of
only
3% and 4. 2%
respectively
.

A detailed view of the diagram reveals that, there was an upward trend in the
number
of graduates in 2006 in almost all the
state
universities except Alberta.
Which
showed
an unexpected decline of 1. 5% as compared to 2001 figures(5. 8%) in terms of graduates
number
.
Furthermore
, all the
states
showed
an increase of at least 2% as compared to 2001 figures.

In
conclusion it
was evident that the
number
of foreign students in Canadian universities
are increased
in a steady manner
over the period of time.
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11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage change in the nubmer of international students graduating from universities in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006 alam re write v. 2

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