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The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v.2

The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v. 2
The information about the air pollution emission in UK from three different sources during the period of 1990 to 2005 is shown in the line chart. The figures are given in millions of tonnes. Overall, it can be seen that there is a downward trend of air pollution in total which the household contributed the least level of pollution over the period. To begin with, in 1900, the total level of pollution was 8 which was all time the highest level of pollution. Following this, it declined steadily by 3 to finish at 5 in the last period. The highest level of pollution in 1900 caused mainly by the industry sector which stood at 6 while the others had a similar number of 1 in 1900. After that, the level of pollution emitted by industry sector fell gradually to 2. 5 in 2002. Nevertheless, the contribution from household sector remained unchanged at 1 until 1999 before decreasing by 0. 5 in 2002. Similarly, the transport’s pollution level fluctuated around 1 until 1999 which then increased to 2. 5 in 2002 as same as those of industry sector in that year. Moving to the remaining period, transportation turned to play the major role in air pollution emission instead of industry sector. The pollution from transportation increased to reach a peak of 3 in 2005. While, industry sector and household were all had a similar movement which plunged to their low of 2 and no emission respectively.
The information about the air
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pollution
emission in UK from three
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different
sources during the period of 1990 to 2005
is shown
in the line chart. The figures are
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given
in millions of tonnes.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that there is a downward trend of air
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pollution
in total which the household contributed the least
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level
of
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pollution
over the period.

To
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begin
with, in 1900, the total
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level
of
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pollution
was 8 which was all time the highest
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level
of
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pollution
. Following this, it declined
steadily
by 3 to finish at 5 in the last period. The highest
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level
of
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pollution
in 1900 caused
mainly
by the
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industry
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sector
which stood at 6 while the others had a similar number of 1 in 1900. After that, the
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level
of
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pollution
emitted by
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industry
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sector
fell
gradually
to 2. 5 in 2002.
Nevertheless
, the contribution from household
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sector
remained unchanged at 1 until 1999
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before
decreasing by 0. 5 in 2002.
Similarly
, the transport’s
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pollution
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level
fluctuated around 1 until 1999 which then increased to 2. 5 in 2002 as same as those of
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industry
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sector
in that year.

Moving to the remaining period, transportation turned to play the major role in air
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pollution
emission
instead
of
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industry
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sector
. The
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pollution
from transportation increased to reach a peak of 3 in 2005. While,
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industry
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sector
and household were all had a similar movement which plunged to their low of 2 and no emission
respectively
.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005. v. 2

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