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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female smokers in Britain during the period between 1950 and 1990. v.2

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female smokers in Britain during the period between 1950 and 1990. v. 2
The bar chart compares the proportions of British men and women who smoked from 1950 to 1990. It is clearly shown that while the number of smoking men fell significantly, the opposite trend was true for the figure of smoking women during the period shown. Additionally, men outnumbered women in smoking. In 1950, there was nearly eight in ten of men smoked compared to 15% that of women. The figure for male smokers gradually decreased to just over 70% when the percentage of female smokers began to rise and almost doubled after 20 years. Then the proportion of smoking men remained stable until 1980; the number of smoking women reached its peak at 40%. At the end of the surveyed period, a sudden drop in the percentage of men in terms of smoking accounted for just over 40%. In comparison, the same pattern experienced in the figure of women smoked, at about a third in total.
The bar chart compares the proportions of British
men
and
women
who smoked from 1950 to 1990.

It is
clearly
shown that while the number of
smoking
men
fell
significantly
, the opposite trend was true for the figure of
smoking
women
during the period shown.
Additionally
,
men
outnumbered
women
in smoking.

In 1950, there was
nearly
eight in ten of
men
smoked compared to 15% that of
women
. The figure for male smokers
gradually
decreased to
just
over 70% when the percentage of female smokers began to rise and almost doubled after 20 years. Then the proportion of
smoking
men
remained stable until 1980; the number of
smoking
women
reached its peak at 40%.

At the
end
of the surveyed period, a sudden drop in the percentage of
men
in terms of
smoking
accounted for
just
over 40%.
In comparison
, the same pattern experienced in the figure of
women
smoked, at about a third in total.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of male and female smokers in Britain during the period between 1950 and 1990. v. 2

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6.5
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