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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by theTourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. v.1

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by theTourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. v. 1
The given line graph shows amount of enquiries which sent to tourist information office by telephone, letter or email and or by person between january until june in a year 2011. It is clear that although in first month of year enquiries recvied in a person was lower than other opportunities, which sending enquiries by telephone was popular way but at end of graph the trend for in person overtook other figures. In January number of enquiries recvied by 3 different ways was lower than 1000, furthermore  after month number of enquiries received by telephone saw considerable decline although enquiries which sent by email or letter remaind fairly stabe for 3 monthes at 700, moreover acoording to graph for the rest of month number of enquiries reached to  tourism post office by person sharply rose from approximately 400 at first month to over than 1800 at end of graph, Although sending enquiries by email was second popular way but at the end declined to under 400. According to graph figure for telephone enquiries witnessed stability and decline but for the end graph numbers experienced growth to 1600 enquiries.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by theTourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. v. 1

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