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The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.3

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
The pie graph illustrates the amount of expenditure for the government of the United Arab Emirates on various sectors in 2000. We can see that the higher budget for social security, by contrast, the lowest one for transport. The analysis for the given graph showed the UAE’s government paid full concentration for social security sector by 100 AED billion. In addition, the health and personal social services was considered the second priority (53 AED billion). The education section was occupied the 38 AED billion from the budget. Moreover, the other expenditure and debt interest were the same amounts with 23 AED billion, which was less than the half expenditure of health and personal social services. The budget for defense, and (industry, agriculture, and employment) was 22 AED billion and 13 AED billion respectively. The second lowest of the section in the annual budget was housing, heritage, and employment with 15 AED billion, which was lower than the budget of education by 23 AED billion. Lastly, the lowest priority in annual UAE’s budget was the transport by 9 AED billion.
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of the United Arab Emirates on various sectors in 2000.

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that the higher
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for
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security, by contrast, the lowest one for transport.

The analysis for the
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graph
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the UAE’s
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paid full concentration for
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security sector by 100 AED
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billion
.
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, the health and personal
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social
services
was considered
the second priority (53 AED
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billion)
. The education section
was occupied
the 38 AED
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billion
from the
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budget
.
Moreover
, the other expenditure and debt interest were the same amounts with 23 AED
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billion
, which was less than the half expenditure of health and personal
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social
services. The
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budget
for defense, and (industry, agriculture, and employment) was 22 AED
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billion
and 13 AED
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billion
respectively
. The second lowest of the section in the annual
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budget
was housing, heritage, and employment with 15 AED
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billion
, which was lower than the
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of education by 23 AED
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.
Lastly
, the lowest priority in annual UAE’s
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was the transport by 9 AED
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.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

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3 paragraphs
179 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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