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The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.
The diagram illustrates how gold sales in Dubai changed from January to December 2002. Overall, the figure fluctuated widely before returning to its original level at the end of the year. Besides, gold sales were at their highest in March, while the weakest figures could be observed in July and September. In the first month of 2002, the figure stood at 200 million dirhams and rose slightly to reach about 225 million in February. This was followed by another increase, although much steeper, in March when sales hit 350 million. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and sales declined dramatically over the next 4 months to reach a little over 100 million in July. August sales saw a significant rise back to January levels as the figure nearly doubled, but it dropped again in September to the same level as it was in July. There was a small increase of about 100 million dirhams in October, after which the figure levelled off and remained relatively unchanged over the last two months of 2002.
The diagram illustrates how gold
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sales
in Dubai
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changed
from January to December 2002.

Overall
, the
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figure
fluctuated
widely
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before
returning to its original level at the
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end
of the year.

Besides
, gold
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sales
were at their highest in March, while the weakest
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figures
could
be observed


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in
July and September.

In the
first
month of 2002, the
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figure
stood at 200
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million
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dirhams
and rose
slightly
to reach about

225
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million
in February. This
was followed
by another increase, although much steeper, in
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March


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when
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sales
hit 350
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million
.
However
, this upward trend was
suddenly
broken and
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sales
declined

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dramatically
over the
next
4 months to reach a
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little
over 100
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million
in July. August
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sales
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saw
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a


significant rise back to January levels as the
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figure
nearly
doubled,
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but
it dropped again in

September to the same level as it was in July. There was a
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small
increase of about 100
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million


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dirhams
in October, after which the
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figure
levelled off and remained
relatively
unchanged over

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the
last two months of 2002.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below gives information about Dubai gold sales in 2002.

Academic
  American English
12 paragraphs
174 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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