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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v.3

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v. 3
The bar chart compares the number of births per thousand women in six different Arabian countries between 1990 and 2000, with a gap of 10 years. Overall, there was a noticeable drop in the fertility rate of women in all these six nations over the period, and the remarkable drop was recorded in Oman. However, the birth rate was comparatively higher in Oman compared to other nations in the survey throughout the period. It is clear that though the fertility rate per women in Oman decreased from 7 to just above 5 in 1990, Oman remained to record the highest fertility rate among other nations followed by Saudi Arabia over a period of 10 years. The figures for childbirth per thousand women in Saudi Arabia was above 6 in 1990, which dropped to well over to 5 in 2000. Noticeably when Qatar and UAE registered almost an equal 4 births per thousand women in the initial year of the survey, Bahrain and Kuwait showed a fertility rate between 3 to 4. By contrast, after 10 years, both the nations experienced a similar falling trend in the fertility rates of their women to roughly an equal 3 and just above 2 respectively.
The bar chart compares the number of births per thousand
women
in six
different
Arabian countries between 1990 and 2000, with a gap of 10 years.
Overall
, there was a noticeable drop in the
fertility
rate
of
women
in all these six
nations
over the period, and the remarkable drop
was recorded
in Oman.
However
, the birth
rate
was
comparatively
higher in Oman compared to other
nations
in the survey throughout the period.

It is
clear
that though the
fertility
rate
per
women
in Oman decreased from 7 to
just
above 5 in 1990, Oman remained to record the highest
fertility
rate
among other
nations
followed by Saudi Arabia over a period of 10 years. The figures for childbirth per thousand
women
in Saudi Arabia was above 6 in 1990, which dropped to well over to 5 in 2000.
Noticeably
when Qatar and UAE registered almost an equal 4 births per thousand
women
in the initial
year
of the survey, Bahrain and Kuwait
showed
a
fertility
rate
between 3 to 4
. By contrast, after 10 years, both the
nations
experienced a similar falling trend in the
fertility
rates
of their
women
to roughly an equal 3 and
just
above 2
respectively
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v. 3

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