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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v.2

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 2
The graph shows how the amount of water used worldwide changed between 1900 and 2000 and water consumptions of two countries compared to their population. Throughout the century, the largest quantity of water was used for agricultural Purposes, and this increased dramatically from about 500 km³ to around 3, 000 km³ in the year 2000. Water used in the industrial and domestic sectors also increased, but consumption was minimal until mid-century. From 1950 onwards, industrial use grew steadily to just over 1, 000 km³, while domestic use rose more slowly to only 300 km³, both far below the levels of consumption by agriculture. The table illustrates the differences in agriculture consumption in some areas of the world by contrasting the amount of irrigated land in Brazil (26, 500 km³) with that in the D. R. C. (100 km²). This means that a huge amount of water is used in agriculture in Brazil, and this is reflected in the figures for water consumption per person: 359 m³ compared with only 8 m³ in the Congo. With a population of 176 million, the figures for Brazil indicate how high agriculture water consumption can be in some countries.
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how the amount of
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used
worldwide
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changed
between 1900 and 2000 and
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consumptions
of two countries compared to their population.

Throughout the century, the largest quantity of
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water
was
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used
for agricultural Purposes, and this increased
dramatically
from about 500 km³ to around 3, 000 km³ in the year 2000.
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Water
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used
in the industrial and domestic sectors
also
increased,
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but
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consumption
was minimal until mid-century. From 1950 onwards, industrial
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use
grew
steadily
to
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just
over 1, 000 km³, while domestic
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use
rose more
slowly
to
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only
300 km³, both far below the levels of
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consumption
by agriculture.

The table illustrates the differences in agriculture
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consumption
in
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some
areas of the world by contrasting the amount of irrigated land in Brazil (26, 500 km³) with that in the D. R. C. (100 km²). This means that a huge amount of
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water
is
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used
in agriculture in Brazil, and this
is reflected
in the figures for
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water
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consumption
per person: 359 m³ compared with
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only
8 m³ in the Congo. With a population of 176 million, the figures for Brazil indicate how high agriculture
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water
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consumption
can be in
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some
countries.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. v. 2

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