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The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v.2

The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v. 2
The given bar chart compares the fertility rates of women from six Gulf countries in 1990 and 2000. As is observed from the given data, the fertility rate has decreased over the decade and women of Oman and Saudi Arabia had a higher fertility rate than women of other Gulf countries. According to the bar graph, initially in 1990, the fertility rates (childbirth per thousand women of a certain age range) in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar and the UAE were from 3-4. Women from Oman and Saudi Arabia had a fertility rate of more than 6 in this same year. After ten years, this rate reduced in all of the given 6 countries. This indicates the less fertility rate of the women of the Gulf countries. The declination maintained a radio for each country and in the year 2000, the women from Oman and Saudi Arabia had a higher fertility rate than the women in other four Gulf countries. In summary, the childbirth per thousand women, which is also known as the fertility rate, in the Gulf countries decreased over the time.
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from six Gulf
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in 1990 and 2000. As
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has decreased over the decade and
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of Oman and Saudi Arabia had a higher
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fertility
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rate
than
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women
of other Gulf countries.

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initially
in 1990, the
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fertility
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rates
(childbirth per thousand
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women
of a certain age range) in Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar and the UAE were from 3-4.
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Women
from Oman and Saudi Arabia had a
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fertility
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rate
of more than 6 in this same year. After ten years, this
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rate
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reduced
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6
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countries
. This indicates the less
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fertility
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rate
of the
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women
of the Gulf
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countries
. The declination maintained a radio for each
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country
and in the year 2000, the
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women
from Oman and Saudi Arabia had a higher
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fertility
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rate
than the
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women
in other four Gulf countries.

In summary, the childbirth per thousand
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women
, which is
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fertility
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rate
, in the Gulf
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countries
decreased over the time.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the fertility rate of women in different Gulf Countries from 1990 to 2000. v. 2

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