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The graph and table below show the number of fishers in millions for different regions in 1980, 1990, and 2000, and the world's top exporters of fish in 2000. v.1

The graph and table below show the number of fishers in millions for different regions in 1980, 1990, and 2000, and the world's top exporters of fish in 2000. v. 1
The column graph gives the number of fishers in five different regions in three decades- 1980, 1990 and 2000, while the table lists down the globally top ten fish exporting countries in 2000. Overall, the number of fishermen in Asia soared over the period and Thailand, Norway and the USA was the top three fish exporters in 2000. Now turning to the details, there were nearly 9 million fishers in Asia in 1980 which was almost double than the combined number of fishers in Africa, America and Europe. Asian population who lived on fishing increased by roughly four million in the next decade while a marginal growth could be observed in the case of other areas except in Europe where the number of fishers actually dropped. In 1990, fishers number in Africa, South America, North America and Europe was less than a million and during the next decade, these numbers remained almost the same except in Europe that witnessed a fractional jump. On the contrary, the number of fishermen in Asia dramatically upsurged and stood at just over 23 million which was overwhelmingly greater than the number of fishers in other parts of the world. The table presents that, in 2000, Thailand was the top exporter of fish globally and the second and third position of this list were held by Norway and the USA despite their remarkably fewer number of fishermen than the Asia. The fourth, seventh and tenth positions of the top ten fish exporting countries were occupied by four Asian countries while the rest were held by other non-Asian countries.
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ten fish exporting
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of fishermen in Asia soared over the period and Thailand, Norway and the USA was the
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three fish exporters in 2000.

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in Asia in 1980 which was almost
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in Africa, America and Europe. Asian population who
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on fishing increased by roughly four
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decade while a marginal growth could
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actually dropped. In 1990,
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in Africa, South America, North America and Europe was less than a
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remained almost the same except in Europe that witnessed a fractional jump.
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exporter of fish globally and the second and third position of this list
were held
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of fishermen than the Asia. The fourth, seventh and tenth positions of the
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ten fish exporting
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IELTS academic The graph and table below show the number of fishers in millions for different regions in 1980, 1990, and 2000, and the world's top exporters of fish in 2000. v. 1

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