Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The graph below shows the effects of different brands of fertilizer on bean plant growth. v.2

The graph below shows the effects of different brands of fertilizer on bean plant growth. v. 2
The graph shows how bean plant’s growth is affected when different fertilizers are used. It is evident that Granny’s Bloomers and K Mark fertilizer are two most effective composts in terms of bean plants growth while Miracle Gro is least effective. According to the column graph, bean plants grow as high as 13 centimetres without any fertilizer. Among the given composts, Granny’s Bloomers has the most significant effect on its growth which helps this plant grow to 27 cm on an average. The second most efficient fertilizer, K Mark, hike the growth to 22 cm which is 11 cm higher than the bean plants natural growth. When Job’s House Plant Spikers is utilised, the bean plants develop to 15 cm, a slight increase than the natural growth. However, with the Miracle Gro, bean plants raise to only 6 cm, 7 cm shorter than its natural growth without any fertilizer. In summary, among the four fertilizer brands, Granny’s Bloomers is the most effective one in terms of bean plant’s growth while Miracle Gro negatively affects its growth.
The graph
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
how
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plant’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
when
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fertilizers
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
. It is evident that Granny’s Bloomers and K Mark
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fertilizer
are two most effective composts in terms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
while Miracle
Possible spelling mistake found.
Gro
is least effective.

According to the column graph,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
grow as high as 13
Possible spelling mistake. 'centimetres' is British English.
centimetres
without any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fertilizer
. Among the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
composts, Granny’s Bloomers has the most significant effect on its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plant
grow to 27 cm on an average. The second most efficient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fertilizer
, K Mark, hike the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
to 22 cm which is 11 cm higher than the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
. When Job’s
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
House
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Plant
Possible spelling mistake found.
Spikers
is
Possible spelling mistake. 'utilised' is British English.
utilised
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
develop to 15 cm, a slight increase than the natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
.
However
, with the Miracle
Possible spelling mistake found.
Gro
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
raise to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
6 cm, 7 cm shorter than its natural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
without any fertilizer.

In summary, among the four
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fertilizer
brands, Granny’s Bloomers is the most effective one in terms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bean
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plant’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
while Miracle
Possible spelling mistake found.
Gro
negatively
affects its
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the effects of different brands of fertilizer on bean plant growth. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts