The bar graph gives data on different transportation systems that people used in a European city in three decades- 1960, 1980 and 2000 and also compares how the habit of going to work and returning home had changed over the 40 years period. Overall, with the widespread use of cars, peoples' habit of using bikes and walking reduced noticeably.
Initially, in 1960, lots of people used to commute either on foot or by a bike, 35% and roughly 27% consecutively compared to only about 7% private cars and about 20% bus usage. After 20 years, the number of car and bus users soared noticeably to 25% and to nearly 28%. The car users grew more than 3 times over 20 years and in the same year, people travelling on foot fell to less than half as it was in 1960. In 2000, only 10% work-goers walked, only about 7% people rode a bicycle compared to 18% bus users and about 38% private car users.
In 1960, the majority of the people travelled to and from work on foot or using a car but the scenario became completely different after 40 years when most of the people used cars or buses.
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The bar graph gives data on
different
transportation systems that
people
used
in a European city in three decades- 1960, 1980 and 2000 and
also
compares how the habit of going to work and returning home had
changed
over the 40 years period.
Overall
, with the widespread
use
of
cars
, peoples' habit of using bikes and walking
reduced
noticeably
.
Initially
, in 1960, lots of
people
used
to commute either on foot or by a bike, 35% and roughly 27%
consecutively
compared to
only
about 7% private
cars
and about 20% bus usage. After 20 years, the number of
car
and bus users soared
noticeably
to 25% and to
nearly
28%. The
car
users grew more than 3 times over 20 years and in the same
year
,
people
travelling on foot fell to less than half as it was in 1960. In 2000,
only
10% work-goers walked,
only
about 7%
people
rode a bicycle compared to 18% bus users and about 38% private
car
users.
In 1960, the majority of the
people
travelled to and from work on foot or using a
car
but
the scenario became completely
different
after 40 years when most of the
people
used
cars
or buses.
answer
can
be followed
as an example of a
very
good
answer.
However
,
please
note that this is
just
one example out of
many
possible approaches.
)
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