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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v.4

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 4
The given bar graph shows data on the type of transportation used to go to work and to return from the work in three different years. As is noticed from the given data, private car has become the most popular mode of transportation for the office goers and over time the popularity of bus has decreased. Initially, in 1960, around 20% people used trains, 7% people used cars, 28% people used tubes and around 40% people used buses to go to work or to return from work. After 20 years, the popularity of train and car increased while the popularity of tube and bus decreased. In this year, more people used train than any other transportation as their mode of office transportation. The least used type of transportation was the tube and personal car in 1980. Finally, in 2000, the scenario changed and the car became the most popular mode of transportation which was used by more than 37% people. The second most popular transportation was tube while train and bus became the least preferred mode of transportation. As is observed, people started preferring private cars over the public bus and train over the time.
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work
and to return from the
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work
in three
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different
years. As
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data, private
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car
has become the most popular
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mode
of
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transportation
for the office goers and over time the popularity of bus has decreased.

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people
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trains
, 7%
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people
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used
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cars
, 28%
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people
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tubes
and around 40%
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people
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used
buses to go to
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work
or to return from
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work
. After 20 years, the popularity of
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train
and
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car
increased while the popularity of
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tube
and bus decreased. In this year, more
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people
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used
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train
than any other
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transportation
as their
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mode
of office
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transportation
. The least
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used
type of
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was the
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tube
and personal
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car
in 1980.
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, in 2000, the scenario
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became the most popular
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mode
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transportation
which was
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used
by more than 37%
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people
. The second most popular
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transportation
was
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tube
while
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train
and bus became the least preferred
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mode
of transportation.

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is observed
,
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people
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started
preferring private
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cars
over the public bus and
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train
over the time.
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37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. v. 4

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195 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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