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The pie chart compares figures for visitors to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different theme parks in Britain in 1999. v.2

The pie chart compares figures for visitors to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different theme parks in Britain in 1999. v. 2
The pie chart gives data about the proportion of tourists to four types of tourist sights in Britain in 1999. Overall, a vast majority of visitors chose to visit theme parks and museums and galleries, while wildlife parks and zoos were the least atractive sites. In theme parks, Black and pleasure Beach seemed to atract the largest percentage of guests compared to others. Around 38 per cent tourists flock to theme parks and museums and galleries as their most favorite destinations. In theme parks, while blackpool pleasure beach attracted nearly a half of visitors, tourists to Alton towers and pleasureland, Souport made up only approximately 16 per cent of the total guests to theme parks. The figure for the remaining sites in theme parks, namely chessington world of adventures and legoland, windsor, was much lower, where they constituted for around 10 per cent of 38 per cent. On the other hand, the percentage of visitors to historic houses and monuments was a half of that of theme parks and museums and galleries, where they made up for about 16 per cent, while Wildlife parks and zoos attracted merely 9 per cent.
The pie chart gives data about the proportion of
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tourists
to four types of
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tourist
sights in Britain in 1999.

Overall
, a vast majority of visitors chose to visit
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theme
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parks
and museums and galleries, while wildlife
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parks
and zoos were the least
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atractive
sites. In
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theme
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parks
, Black and pleasure Beach seemed to
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atract
the largest percentage of guests compared to others.

Around 38 per cent
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tourists
flock to
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theme
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parks
and museums and galleries as their most favorite destinations. In
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theme
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parks
, while
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blackpool
pleasure beach attracted
nearly
a half of visitors,
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tourists
to Alton towers and
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pleasureland
,
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Souport
made up
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only
approximately 16 per cent of the total guests to
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theme
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parks
. The figure for the remaining sites in
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theme
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parks
,
namely
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chessington
world of adventures and
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legoland
,
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windsor
, was much lower, where they constituted for around 10 per cent of 38 per cent.

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, the percentage of visitors to historic
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houses
and monuments was a half of that of
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theme
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parks
and museums and galleries, where they made up for about 16 per cent, while Wildlife
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parks
and zoos attracted
merely
9 per cent.
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20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The pie chart compares figures for visitors to four categories of tourist attraction and to five different theme parks in Britain in 1999. v. 2

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