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The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. v.4

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. v. 4
The line graph compares the electricity demand in England during a regular day in winter and in summer while the pie chart shows the usages of the electricity. Generally speaking, during the winter season, the demand for electricity was much higher than that of the summer in England. During a typical day during winter, the average electricity requirement was around 35 thousand units while this demand was about 16 thousand units during a summer day. Again the electricity requirement fluctuates during the different hours of a typical day and this demand seems lowest in early morning and highest at late night. Based on the pie chart data it can be clearly seen that room and water heating require more than half of the total electricity usages. Washing machines, kettle and ovens consume around 18% electricity while lighting houses, watching TV and listening to radio require 15% of the total electricity. Finally, the same percentage, 15% of electricity, is consumed by English people for running vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric devices.
The line graph compares the
electricity
demand
in England during a regular day in winter and in summer while the pie chart
shows
the usages of the
electricity
.
Generally
speaking, during
the winter season
, the
demand
for
electricity
was much higher than that of the summer in England.

During a typical day during winter, the average
electricity
requirement was around 35 thousand units while this
demand
was about 16 thousand units during a summer day. Again the
electricity
requirement fluctuates during the
different
hours of a typical day and this
demand
seems lowest in early morning and highest at late night.

Based on the pie chart data it can be
clearly
seen
that room and water heating require more than half of the total
electricity
usages. Washing machines, kettle and ovens consume around 18%
electricity
while lighting
houses
, watching TV and listening to radio require 15% of the total
electricity
.
Finally
, the same percentage, 15% of
electricity
,
is consumed
by English
people
for running vacuum cleaners, food mixers and electric devices.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. v. 4

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