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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v.5

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 5
The diagram gives some statistical information about the unemployment scenario in Japan and the United States between 1993 and 1999. Generally speaking, these two countries showed a contrasting trend in their unemployment ratio between March, 93 and March, 99. In 1993, 2. 5% Japanese could not find a suitable job which represents a 97. 5% employment rate in this country. At that time, 7. 0% of US citizens were unemployed. Over the time unemployment rate in Japan gradually increased while it actually decreased in the USA. After three years, March 1996 to be exact, unemployed Japanese increased by 1. 5% and decreased by the same ratio in the USA. This pattern continues and in the Mid-98, the unemployment rates in these two countries intersected at exactly 4. 5%. Next year, the USA managed to arrange jobs for more unemployed citizens and thus decreased this rate further while it went higher in Japan. Interestingly, the unemployment ratio in the USA dropped significantly while increased in Japan over the period. In 1999, just over 4% American's were jobless while more than 4. 5% Japanese did not have a job.
The diagram gives
some
statistical information about the
unemployment
scenario in
Japan
and the United States between 1993 and 1999.
Generally
speaking, these two countries
showed
a contrasting trend in their
unemployment
ratio between March, 93 and March, 99.

In 1993, 2. 5% Japanese could not find a suitable job which represents a 97. 5% employment
rate
in this country. At that time, 7. 0% of US citizens
were unemployed
. Over the time
unemployment
rate
in
Japan
gradually
increased while it actually decreased in the USA. After three years, March 1996 to be exact, unemployed Japanese increased by 1. 5% and decreased by the same ratio in the USA. This pattern continues and in the Mid-98, the
unemployment
rates
in these two countries intersected at exactly 4. 5%.
Next
year, the USA managed to arrange jobs for more unemployed citizens and
thus
decreased this
rate
further
while it went higher in
Japan
.
Interestingly
, the
unemployment
ratio in the USA dropped
significantly
while increased in
Japan
over the period. In 1999,
just
over 4% American's were jobless while more than 4. 5% Japanese did not have a job.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. v. 5

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