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The bar chart shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v.1

The bar chart shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v. 1
The nar diagram illustrates number of hours spent in teaching in different schools in Japan, Spain, Iceland, and the USA in 2001. From the chart, we can observe that in the USA, the primary, secondary, and upper secondary teachers spent more hours in teaching compared to the other three countries. Another observation that can be extracted from the diagram is that upper secondary teachers teachers more hours than the primary and lower secondary teachers in all the four countries. The lowest number of hours spent by primary and lower secondary teachers is an Iceland, while that of upper secondary is in Japan. The general trait which can be noticed in the given data is, primary level teachers spend less time in teaching than lower secondary teachers, and the upper secondary teacher spent more hours than the remaining categories.
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schools in Japan, Spain, Iceland, and the USA in 2001.

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primary
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, and
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in teaching compared to the other three countries. Another observation that can
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more
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than the
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and lower
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teachers
in all the four countries. The lowest number of
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primary
and lower
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secondary
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is an Iceland, while that of
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secondary
is in Japan.

The general trait which can
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in the
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level
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spend less time in teaching than lower
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secondary
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, and the
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than the remaining categories.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the number of hours each teacher spent teaching in different schools in four different countries in 2001. v. 1

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