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The table shows social and economic indicators for four different countries in 1994. Summarise the main features. v.1

The table shows social and economic indicators for four different countries in 1994. Summarise the main features. v. 1
The table shows a comparison of social and economic indicators such as annual income per person, life expectancy, daily calorie supply per person, and the adult literacy rate of four different countries in 1994. According to the data gathered by United Nations statistics, annual income per person is highest in Japan, and second highest in Canada, both being about 10, 000 US dollars. On the contrary, yearly income per person is less than 200 dollars in Peru and Zaire. Life expectancy at birth is also reduced in these countries, with 51 and 47 years, respectively in Peru and Zaire. The same is higher in Japan and Canada, around 80 years. The data indicate that Canada and Japan are the most privileged countries in numbers, while Peru and Zaire stand at the other end. Canada and Japan have an adult literacy rate of 99 %. Peru and they have a literacy rate of 68 and 34 % respectively. The general conclusion that can be drawn from the table is that Peru and Zaire need to be improved socially and economically.
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shows
a comparison of social and economic indicators such as annual income per
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person
, life expectancy, daily calorie supply per
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person
, and the adult literacy rate of four
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different
countries in 1994.

According to the data gathered by United Nations statistics, annual income per
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person
is highest in
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Japan
, and second highest in Canada, both being about 10, 000 US dollars.
On the contrary
, yearly income per
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person
is less than 200 dollars in Peru and Zaire. Life expectancy at birth is
also
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reduced
in these countries, with 51 and 47 years,
respectively
in Peru and Zaire. The same is higher in
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Japan
and Canada, around 80 years. The data indicate that Canada and
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Japan
are the most privileged countries in numbers, while Peru and Zaire stand at the other
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end
. Canada and
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Japan
have an adult literacy rate of 99 %. Peru and they have a literacy rate of 68 and 34 %
respectively
.

The general conclusion that can
be drawn
from the table is that Peru and Zaire need to be
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improved
socially
and
economically
.
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IELTS academic The table shows social and economic indicators for four different countries in 1994. Summarise the main features. v. 1

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